The Blind Trombonist

Last review of my first night on these forums, and you know, you made me happy, because there is really no error for me to complain about today. Sorry about ...

I personally think this idea is very very clever. ^^ That being said, there are still a few issues...hold on let me get this out of my system... :smt044 GRAH!!! ...

I doubt you'll see any new criticism here, everyone is very good at covering things, but here I go. There is a bit of what I call "awkward phrasing" in ...

Ok, I like the story. However, detail is my lover and I want to spend more time with her! (sorry, I'm a crazy person, this is how I talk) Main ...

I like criticizing...but I like it even more when I don't have to criticize. I thought that the story was very beautiful. At the end, it went from being a ...

As you requested, I will stick solely to the characters (not that there was much to criticize, it was well-done. ^^) I really like the girl, she seems like she'll ...

Ok, I have to say there were many mistakes in this particular story...but don't worry, my next installment in my own series will look worse. ^^; There were many spelling ...

Ok, so I really like the concept of this story and I really do not have much criticism to give you. I have to say, I like how open you ...

I'm very impressed with your depth of description! I sincerely do like that kind of thing. (It used to be a huge problem for me, so I'm glad that I ...

Minor grammatical things, but I'm sure many others have already mentioned that, so I won't annoy you. I know it's more difficult in first-person, but I would like to see ...